Saturday, April 4, 2009

Soft broadcast lead

SQUIRREL CAUSES A RAILROAD TIE-UP

30 SECONDS

METRO-NORTH COMMUTERS WERE STRANDED IN MANHATTEN THIS

AFTERNOON WHEN SQUIRREL CLIMBED ONTO THE RAILROADS POWERLINES

CAUSING A POWER OUTTAGE.

THE POWERSURGE WEAKEND AN OVERHEAD BRACKET EXPOSING A WIRE…A

PASSING TRAIN CAUGHT THE DANGLED WIRE UNDERNEATH TEARING DOWN

ALLTHE LINES.

THE SQUIRELL WAS ELECTROCUTED AFTER CROSSING AROUND THE POWERLINES.

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1 comment:

  1. Your broadcast format is good, but your lead is a little too "hard news." Try for a softer, less "5W/1H" lead-in to get my attention, then tell me the news.

    8.5/10

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