Fact Set #1: Pipe fitter
Immediate Identification lead:
An Employee of Springfield’s Gross Engineers, Duane le Chance, suffered from third-degree burns when he accidently touched a power line carrying 15,000 volts, yesterday.
Delayed Identification lead:
A Springfield man is in critical condition after suffering third-degree burns when he accidently touched a power line carrying 15,000 volts, yesterday.
Fact Set #2: Car accident
Immediate Identification:
An accident on highway U.S 63 injured one Springfield civilian James W. Cunning, 20, whose vehicle was struck by Wayne Clay, 19, who crossed the center line, according to Lincoln County Sheriff’s Department.
Delayed Identification lead:
A Springfield man is in the hospital today after another driver crossed the center line and struck his vehicle on U.S. 63, according to the Lincoln County sheriffs Department.
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1a: Good, except don't start with his employer. Put that in paragraph 2.
ReplyDelete1b: Good, but say where/how the accident happened ("while replacing pipes on the roof of the Springfield Power plant").
2a: Start with the guy who was hurt - that's what makes this news. Don't call him a civilian -- makes it sound like you're on a military base.
2b: Good
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