A squirrel gets electrocuted on the Metro-North Railroad causing a huge tie-up on Monday’s afternoon mass transit commute from Manhattan. NY.
According to Donna Evans, spokeswomen for Metro-North said that the squirrels adventurous pass through the power lines caused an electrical surge. That weakened an overhead bracket causing a wire from the overhead bracket to dangle down and envelop on a train passing underneath that ended up tearing down all the lines.
About 47,000 rail commuters waited for hours for trains, but they never came. Service was restored by crews Tuesday morning.
I must have missed this one when I was grading last week.
ReplyDeleteYou've written this like a hard news lead, not a "soft" feature-style lead. That's one problem. The other is that a squirrel getting electrocuted isn't news.
Look at how some of your classmates handled this assignment (and look at my comments too), then try this again.
10/15 -- please revise and republish.