An example of my writing using a piece from "The Future of News" :
The creation of the iPhone has also been another way for media to reach people. There are different applications for different niches such as for sports, whether, celebrity news, fashion, world news and local news. The Weather Channel and MLB are two of many media applications that are being used. The MLB application has scores, states, video, and other tools for the baseball fans. I own an iPhone and I installed The New York Times and I really like it because when I don’t have the chance to pick up the latest copy this application does gives me the latest news through my phone, which I think is more convenient for me.
The FOG Index:9.6
What I learned from this exercise is I could work on cutting my sentences and increase my vocabulary. However I do like that my writing is easy to read. To help my writing I need to read more.
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A FOG index of 9.6 isn't bad. I think it's mostly because your last sentence is quite long. If you split that sentence in two, I bet you'd be right around 8.
ReplyDelete15/15