Friday, January 30, 2009

Leads Exercise #2- Air Crash revised

131 passengers aboard U.S Air flight from Chicago were killed yesterday when plane crashed outside Pittsburgh making this the worst U.S air disaster in the past three years. 

1 comment:

  1. Fact error -- the plane was coming from Chicago, not heading into Chicago.

    Also, what makes this story news is not just that a plane crashed, but that all 131 people on board were killed. So that information needs to be in your opening sentence.

    Please try again.

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